2010-09-09 15:35 RT @googlebooks: Victorious warriors win first and then go to war, while defeated warriors go to war first and then seek to win....

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Poor Minako! You really make me feel for her. It does seem like she's always unlucky in love...
Grammar-wise, I noticed a few incomplete sentences and one unnecessary comma. There was nothing that really disrupted the flow of the story. The line "Minako knew she was screwed," bugged me a little, though. I think it sounded a little too colloquial to match the serious, almost poetic tone of the rest of the story.
Your portrayal of Minako is right on, and you manage to show a lot about her character through this one incident. The ending does seem like it leaves you hanging, but I think it works here. Overall this was a nice one-shot!

I feel moved by your story. However, I still regret about the ending. It's opening for sure but does not satisfy me as a curious reader. It'd great that Minako start searching for her love. So if you could expand the plot into more chapters in that way, that'll turn into a very interesting journey searching for love.

Awww...ok I want her to be happy bring him back! lol I guess it is true we are only in and out of each other lives 5 seconds at a time. Good Job!

I felt so sad for Mina. She always has such poor luck at love. Maybe you might write a sequel where she does finally find it! Why not, it would be a real bit of fun and be a nice follow-up to your first story. I did find a couple of grammar mistakes, word use things, just take a peek and you will see for yourself. Great job anyways. bye!

Story is soooo awesome so far..plez finish it. I want to know if Minako is finally gonna see him again.