 | Ponderings of a Neo-Moon Princess
Reviewed by Anonymous - Monday July 09, 2007 at 01:38
Hey you've wetted our appetite, love your portrayal of Small Lady, I hope you will bless us with a new chapter soon, this is really lovely | | Ponderings of a Neo-Moon Princess
Reviewed by SailorPheonix3 - Wednesday June 27, 2007 at 13:37
This story was awesome! Rini growing up and her charater you potrayed her maturity from the needy little girl to a young woman looking forward toward her destiny. Great job! | | Ponderings of a Neo-Moon Princess
Reviewed by Loki - Tuesday June 26, 2007 at 16:35
Enchanting telling
WISE: Krysia, I loved this. I found little fault with it. Like you, I have explored Rini-Small Lady as a major character, and you do her justice here... I love stories that look at what might come after childhood for her. I am always impressed by stories like this and love writing them. But here you've set the mood, the stage and done it quite nicely. I look forward to seeing what other things you have in store and love this as much as I love 'Too Sexy for my Fur' love Moon Cat stories, too! Salutations on this gem! *hands you a glowing ginzuishou and a Tux rose* | | Storytime--Myths & Legends
Reviewed by ButtaUsagi - Tuesday October 24, 2006 at 10:21
Read this a while back and is still reading it today! This is still a cute classic, one of the first few fanfictions that got me hooked on Sailor Moon Fan Fiction! Beautiful! | | Flesh and Blood
Reviewed by Loki - Monday December 26, 2005 at 13:32
A powerful and moving story.
WISE: I can see a great improvement in your writing from the previous story, but there are still some grammar, repetition x the over use of words like _slight_ word usage flaws and structure -- you need to re-edit and clean up the errors to polish and make this story as good as it deserves to be, and give it 100% as it deserves nothing less than your very best. ^_^
Your vocabulary, ability to create the emotional tapestry to present a picture of Rei her mother and their relationship with her father was amazing. You write with passion and this shines through despite the minor impediments on the technical side of things.
All-in-all, a wonderful and touching narrative with excellent characterization and affect, A tear krept into the corners of my eyes, and to do that for your readers takes talent. You are almost there! ^_^ *hands you pink and golden roses and bows* L.
=^_^= | | Reflections
Reviewed by Loki - Monday December 26, 2005 at 13:01
A good start as far as the narrative is concerned.
WISE: In this story, again, I must say, while the storytelling is wonderful, the narrative is dragged down by typos, grammar, punctuation, structural and word usage problems. You do far better with an editor. But, I must say, you are a darn good storyteller. I think you can improve your technical skills.
You have the talent, just take this latter aspect more seriously and show us how much you love your craft as I know you do, just translate it into a little skill-building and you will be okay. Mind you, this was written in 2003, I know in at least one future story you have done this. But I will treat each story on its merits. Just proof and edit via story manager. ^_^
All the best and hope you breathe new life into this story! *hands you sapphire roses and bows* L. A Moon Cat is forever WISE, love your story!
=^_^= | | A Simple Thing
Reviewed by Loki - Monday December 26, 2005 at 12:37
In a word, brilliant!
WISE: this is the third of your stories I have read, and I observe how your writing has blossomed from piece to piece, I could not find fault with it at all, and with this I am happy! Congrats on a fabulous effort! *hands you red roses and bows* L.
=^_^= | | A Mother's Daughter
Reviewed by Loki - Monday December 26, 2005 at 12:26
This story was filled with tenderness and warmth, and the emotional power well presented.
WISE: I thought this story in a technical sense has progressed, there are still some minor punctuation, spelling with way-ward, should be wayward. Grammar and typos fewer, but a quick clean up via story manager should take care of those.
All-in-all, a wonderful heart felt story with angst and love. Congrats on a great little story. *hands you more rose quartz roses and bows* L.
=^_^= | | Storytime--Myths & Legends
Reviewed by Loki - Monday December 26, 2005 at 12:01
An enchanting little story, it was clever and full of wonder.
WISE: I know you wrote this a while back, but it has a really nice feel to it. I would like to encourage you to go back over it and fix the typos and minor grammar and structural flaws, they are not too difficult to clear up -- you used the word _though_ when it should have been, through and had letters missing off words _you_ when it should have been your etc -- little things like that. clearing these slight imperfections will enhance your story -- it is worth the effort,eh? ^_^ Aside from these minor points, I loved it.
*hands you a pink quartz rose and bows* L. A Moon Cat is forever WISE, love your story!
=^_^= | | Too Sexy for My Fur
Reviewed by RoseWinter - Friday June 24, 2005 at 23:40
LOL Arti is too sweet for his own good. Very good fanfic. The sad thing is as I read it I had "Too Sexy for My Shirt" playing in my head. LOL Keep Writing! |
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