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Reviewed by angelsere - Saturday February 28, 2004 at 06:06
Interesting. I like it and I can't wait for the next chapter. | |
Reviewed by SweetDreamer - Friday February 13, 2004 at 03:01
Very Intriguing.
A new way to look at the history of the lunarians. I like this new historical perspective: the lunarians greatest enemy was their creator.
Please, please continue with this, although I do not know where your exactly going with the prologue, but nevertheless, I am hooked.
..~..*Sweet Dreamer*..~..
PS: Keep up the great work! | |
Reviewed by Eimar - Thursday February 12, 2004 at 04:28
Wow! This is fascinating and tantalizing and a cliffhanger and everything else! Please continue this soon, 'cause I'd absolutely adore to read the complete story! | |
Reviewed by MoonAnge1 - Wednesday February 11, 2004 at 23:15
This story seems interesting, however, I did notice a few mistakes. You seemed to forget some essential words in your sentences, and often, some of them were run offs. In addition, you repeated ideas when describing Chaos, and the destruction and mayhem he had caused. Also, some gramatical errors were noticed.
However, overall, the story seems to be very dark, possessive, intriguing... I'd like to see where it's going, especially with the mysterious aura you had created. It is definitely one of the most unique things I had ever seen, and I am positive you will not find another story like it.
From the small prologue you had written, a reader can only infer so much. I can only wait 'til more is written to discover the plot, the meaning of this work.
In the meanwhile, watch out for small tricks of writing. The story poses to be interesting. I can only hope for more.
Please continue. You have extreme potential. |
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